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Intimacy
In to me; see.

It calls me in the night
When I'm down and drunk
It calls me in the night
When the lights go down.

I hear it in my dreams
Echoes around my mind
The laughter of a baying crowd
A girl's unflinching sneer

This red man in my soul
He takes all over me
I see things through his eyes
When the dark rage is on me

When I'm standing on a bridge
Redman whispers at my ear
Drags me down with him
Takes me unto the brink

Don't hurt me anymore
I ask the man every time
Smiles wider than the sky
And takes over me!

He's me when I see a friend
In a happier mood than I
He snarls and drives 'em all away
And keeps me all to himself.

I see him in other people's eyes
In the lonely and the desperate
I see him smiling back at me
When ever I close my eyes.
We all have a demon that follows us around. Redman is mine.
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TristanCody Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Student Writer
I really like the "in to me; see" because instead of saying "into me" you separated into to become in to. Allowing a much more segregated sound, matching Intimacy more. That alone makes me adore this. Great work. :clap:

The philosophy or the lesson you're talking about is also one that many can relate to. But, it is not lost in the common noise. Very much a solid piece of work.

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TheLastIconoclast Featured By Owner May 9, 2013
I actually wrote this as a blues song. I guess it could work either way.
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TristanCody Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Student Writer
I definitely could feel that. I love Blues music a lot. But, that one line really stuck to me. It was rather beautiful.
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sleepy-kisses Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is really good :)
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TheLastIconoclast Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
Thanks!
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Sinnomangirl Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really like the play on words in the beginning!
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TheLastIconoclast Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
Thanks. It's not mine, I borrowed it from a girl I know.
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